An essay about a company and its goal, please help me

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Hello everyone,

I have to write a small essay in English about the company that specialised in the mobile industry. It consists of two main parts. The first part concentrates on the company itself and the second part is about the goal of the company.

Please have a look at the essay and please help me correct it. I have already double checked but I would like to make sure if the essay is clear and clean.

Thanks a lot in advance :),

Sehsucht

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The Essay:

GNT is a global company which was founded in Mr. Ho Tung Lam in Japan and was incorporated on May 12th in 2000. In the daunting Japan market, GNT is one of the largest competitors in the cellular industry with more than ten years experience. The cell phone has become for a long time the indispensable high-end device in the Japanese market. Looking through the vast use of mobile equipments in the modern world, GNT is ambitious to put one step forward in the global market; by applying state-of-the-art technology and providing end-users with high-end solutions. By developing greater understanding of the global market, GNT can successfully handle in vast quantity of business fields. GNT offers high-end solutions and has solid cooperation with vast quantity of partners around the world. 2011 is so-called the banner year with lots of new endeavours for GNT, not only because of the influence of the March’s Tsunami in Japan but also thanks to the globalization of our business. In 2011, GNT endeavours to expand our business globally and is currently looking forward to potential customers and cooperation partners not only locally in Japan but also the striking global market. So often, GNT considers the globalisation as one of the leading force for his success.

The aim of GNT is to demystify the world in the striking era of globalisation. He can help the end-users experience a whole striking world with no frontiers. Looking through the vast achievements of GNT in the past few years, it could be mentioned that GNT has been becoming the multinational company with highly globalised way of conducting business and internal affairs. For 2011 as a whole, we expect to see our upcoming launch of the global Mobion.com, an innovative communication platform which are designed for Mac/PC or other high-end mobile devices.

These days, each mobile device plays a striking role and has been becoming an inevitable equipment of every end-user worldwide. Hopefully, GNT will inspire you to create more visually rich vision of the world with no frontiers, by providing vast striking solutions in the mobile industry.
 

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I don’t call the below my correction. It is just that if I am in your shoes, I will write so. Somewhere I don’t quite get what you meant cz I am not in your company and even not in the industry . Correct me or ignore my errors either you would like.



Do you mean mobile phone industry ?


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Original from Japan, GNT- founded by Mr. Ho Tung Lam and incorporated on May 12, 2000- is spreading its activities out of nation and reaching towards the global market. In the dawning of Japanese market, GNT is one of the largest producers in the cellular phone industry with more than ten years of experience. Since recent decades, the cell phone has become indispensable high-end device in the Japanese market .Due to a significant increase in using wireless devices; GNT is ambitious to conquer the global market by applying state-of-the-art technology and providing end-users with high-end solutions. Expecting with studying more features of the global market, GNT is able to seize an almost-whole market share in its industry. GNT also offers high-end solutions and has solid cooperation with a great number of partners over the world. The year 2011 is so-called the incident year to GNT’s business, the economic-slowdowned influence of the March Tsunami hitting Japan and the globalization of the industry itself. In 2011, GNT has devised a global strategy which is to approach multinational customers as well cooperation partners. ( I think : "looking forward to" means the company is waiting for multinational customers. However, it should be to look for or approach ) GNT positions the globalization as one of the leading forces for its success( or development ??).


The aim of GNT is to demystify the world in the striking era of globalization. It can help the end-users experience the completely striking world without frontiers. Through great achievements in past few years, GNT believes to become the multinational company with globalized conception of conducting business and internal affairs. For the whole 2011, we expect to see our upcoming launch of the global Mobion.com - an innovative communication platform designed for Mac/PC or other high-end mobile devices.
As a trend, single mobile device has been playing a striking role and becoming an inevitable equipment of every end-user worldwide. Hopefully, GNT will inspire you to create more visually rich vision of the world by providing striking solutions in the mobile industry.
 
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Dear Scarlett0406,

Thank you a lot for your correction.

Have a nice day ;)

Sehsucht
 

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not at all. just a little helping out as i can
 
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