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    Revise my essay: Rates of smoking in Someland

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    In this double line graph, the smoking rates (per 1000 people) for females and males are scrutinized between 1960 and 2000 in Someland. However, it represents a decline for both men and women during the later 1975.
    In 1960, smoking was extremely prevalent among men: 60% were smokers, while only 10% of females reported being smokers. From the 1960s onwards, smoking prevalence among woman increased fairly rapidly until mid-1970s, around a fifth (19%) in 1965 and 32% by 1975. In comparison, the percentage of men who smoke decreased gradually to approximately 50% by 1975. Since then the women’s rate has remained fairly steady until 1990, but the rates among men has continued to fall slowly to 40%.
    Trends in smoking in both men and women decreased significantly, from 40% in the 1990s to 27% in the 2000s for men’s figure. Similarly, the rates of female smokers reported 30% in the 1990s and, 22% since 2000.
    In conclusion, the number of men smokers decreased enormously during the 20th century, and it has never been a majority habit among women.
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