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    Bassim is offline Senior Member
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    Default Please, would you proofread my poem.

    A WISH

    I wish I could pass away slowly,
    life trickling out of me drop by drop,
    with the smile on my face in defiance;
    a long awaited satisfaction.

    And then the pain raging in its impotence
    its knives now broken and blunt.
    It makes a miserable figure in its jealousy,
    watching Death and me kissing passionately,
    waiting for the train which seems never to come.

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    Default Re: Please, would you proofread my poem.

    Dear Gil,

    Thank you so much for proofreading my poem.

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