Results 1 to 2 of 2
  1. #1
    rainous's Avatar
    rainous is offline Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Other
      • Native Language:
      • Galician
      • Home Country:
      • Armenia
      • Current Location:
      • Antilles
    Join Date
    Jun 2011
    Posts
    336
    Post Thanks / Like

    drenched in thoughts

    "I often find myself drenched in thoughts thinking I might as well just give it all up and jump into the river."

    Can anyone please help me find and correct any grammatical problems in this sentence, if there is any?

    I am especially not happy with the underlined part which seems somewhat redundant.
    But I don't know how I should fix it.
    Suggestions please~

    Thanks

    It's not me by the way.

  2. #2
    5jj's Avatar
    5jj is offline VIP Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Retired English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • England
      • Current Location:
      • Czech Republic
    Join Date
    Oct 2010
    Posts
    28,167
    Post Thanks / Like

    Re: drenched in thoughts

    Quote Originally Posted by rainous View Post
    "I often find myself drenched in thoughts, thinking I might as well just give it all up and jump into the river."
    With the comma, it's acceptable grammatically. 'Drenched in thoughts' sounds very unnatural to me. I cannot think of an alternative that really covers it. All I can come up with is "I often find myself overwhelmed by thoughts of giving it all up and jumping into the river", but I am not sure that that's what you want to say.

Similar Threads

  1. far from our thoughts?
    By sky753 in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: 25-Sep-2009, 04:01
  2. I need your thoughts
    By hashem in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: 15-Apr-2009, 03:46
  3. To have second thoughts/ On second thoughts?
    By sambistapt in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 27-May-2008, 19:28
  4. My thoughts
    By Flash in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: 17-Jul-2005, 17:10
  5. Second thoughts are best
    By shane in forum General Language Discussions
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: 19-Aug-2003, 00:18

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •