The obscure ritual of a warm bath, the choice of the proper dress to wear - in order that everyone desires me, notices me and envys me more than usual -, the strong attempts to stiffen (OR tighten) the corpet appropriately - until my damsels' hands bleed and I can hold in my own high wiggly (OR sinuous) hips, while I clench an hanky among my teeth to withstand the clean rhythmical and strong knots - and the carefull comb-out of my reddish, long and too unruly hair > this is wayyy too long. you should break it up so that it would be more clear.
"strong" is unclear because you seem to be using it as a "noun". perhaps you mean to say "strong helper or maid"?
"stiffen" > use tighten
"wiggly" > sinuous seems more appropriate
"knots" > i'm not sure what you're referring to here...
"burst into" > sounds good already
"knowing" > already sounds good
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