Need Help On Grammar

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ediblegrammar

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Hi admins :) I'm sorry I post this thread again. Is it okay if we post it here instead of the Poetry forum/channel? Because I really need help on the grammar and it's quite urgent actually.

I wrote this but maybe there are grammatical mistakes somewhere. Please help...

Thank you so much.

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Look at how we lead technology
With great unity, strengths and dreams

Desire, dedication, discipline
We now stand in the eyes of the world

Let’s thank Him for his blessings
The source of strength and harmony
Strive for the best
Put our dreams to the test
The great values lead us all

Eminent quality
It’s you, our priority
Consistency, Innovative
In team we hail to succeed
Efficiency
For those in need
Honesty, Sincerity

Walk hand-in-hand, side-by-side
We lead our way to victory
Our spirit will never collide
Togetherness is the key

We are determined to succeed
No obstacle stands in our way
For every success we achieve
Will be shared, we believe
In our hands it will be
 

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Grammatically it's mostly OK, with poetic licence accounting for any problems.

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