Results 1 to 3 of 3
  1. #1
    Nate22 is offline Newbie
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Student or Learner
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States
    Join Date
    Sep 2011
    Posts
    1
    Post Thanks / Like

    Default Help with School Club Mission Statement

    Hey, I'm in the process of creating a student organization on my college campus, and I'm having trouble with writing up the mission statement for the organizations constitution. The format of the mission statement is as follows: the mission statement of [group name] is to...

    The mission statement is limited to 30 words or less.

    The goals of my group are to raise awareness on the effects of modified food and water on health, raise awareness on the environmental repercussions from modified food, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    So far I have two different statements written up.

    1.
    The missionof G.R.O.W.T.H. is to raise awareness on modified food and water and its effects on our health and the environment, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    2. The mission of G.R.O.W.T.H. is to raise awareness on modified food and water and its effects on our health, the repercussions on the environment, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    Are these statements grammatically correct and do they properly convey my goals? I would like to convey the message that there are repercussions of modified food on the environment, but don't know how to phrase it correctly.

    Any help on this would be greatly appreciated.


  2. #2
    billmcd is offline Key Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States
    Join Date
    Mar 2009
    Posts
    3,505
    Post Thanks / Like

    Default Re: Help with School Club Mission Statement

    Quote Originally Posted by Nate22 View Post
    Hey, I'm in the process of creating a student organization on my college campus, and I'm having trouble with writing up the mission statement for the organizations constitution. The format of the mission statement is as follows: the mission statement of [group name] is to...

    The mission statement is limited to 30 words or less.

    The goals of my group are to raise awareness on the effects of modified food and water on health, raise awareness on the environmental repercussions from modified food, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    So far I have two different statements written up.

    1. The mission of G.R.O.W.T.H. is to raise awareness on ("of" OR "about") modified food and water and its effects on our health and the environment, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    2. The mission of G.R.O.W.T.H. is to raise awareness on modified food and water and its effects on our health, the repercussions on the environment, and to promote healthier lifestyle alternatives.

    Are these statements grammatically correct and do they properly convey my goals? I would like to convey the message that there are repercussions of modified food on the environment, but don't know how to phrase it correctly.

    Any help on this would be greatly appreciated.
    I like #1 with suggested change.

  3. #3
    susiedq is offline Member
    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Interested in Language
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • United States
      • Current Location:
      • United States
    Join Date
    Sep 2010
    Posts
    268
    Post Thanks / Like

    Default Re: Help with School Club Mission Statement

    I have heard that a good mission statement states a purpose and who benefits from that purpose.

    The mission of G.R.O.W.T.H. is to educate people about
    healthier lifestyle alternatives by raising their awareness
    of the effects on our health from modified foods and water.

Similar Threads

  1. Mission Statement
    By Gina Yeung in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 25-Feb-2010, 14:53
  2. Help with review of personal statement for Business School
    By Benno1323 in forum Letter Writing
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 25-Jul-2009, 20:28
  3. Personal statement for medical school help
    By charlesdhngo in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 21-Jul-2008, 18:22
  4. Medical School Personal Statement Reader Needed
    By pnguy005 in forum CVs, Resumes and Applications
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 25-Jun-2008, 19:22
  5. Please revise my pharmacy school personal statement
    By rxgirl in forum Editing & Writing Topics
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 05-Sep-2005, 16:24

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •