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    Please check my work

    I found myself in a strange city which seemed deserted and dead. I walked along a wide and gloomy avenue. I was surrounded by majestic buildings, which casted a dead unnatural shadows heightened mood o horror and mystery. Disturbing the maze of paths seemed to have no exit. At the end I came to the large square, around which stretched rows of arcades. In the middle rose a mystical statue, depicting unrealistic figure. The fronts of buildings lay motionless clocks constantly pointing south. Dead silence meant that I could hear my own heart beating. Suddenly crazy clocks tips spun in the wrong direction the earth schnook and I heard a shrill noise. Among the buildings went spending locomotive surrounded by clouds o smoke. She passed me raising clouds of dust into the air and entered in the clearance between the arcades. After that there was dead and silence again. I stood amazed and speechless with fear. I had the impression that I will get insane. I wake up. It was just s nightmare. Feeling a great relief I got up and looked around me. I was in a strange city.


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    Quote Originally Posted by tomasz View Post
    Hello

    Please check my work

    I found myself in a strange city which seemed deserted and dead. I walked along a wide and gloomy avenue. I was surrounded by majestic buildings, which casted a dead unnatural shadows, causing a heightened mood of horror and mystery. The disturbing maze of paths seemed to have no exit. At the end I came to the large square, around which stretched rows of arcades. In the middle rose a mystical statue, depicting an unrealistic figure. The fronts of buildings lay motionless, clocks constantly pointing south. Dead silence meant that I could hear my own heart beating. Suddenly, crazy clock hands spun in the wrong direction, the earth shook, and I heard a shrill noise. Among the buildings went a speeding[?] locomotive surrounded by clouds of smoke. She It passed me, raising clouds of dust into the air and entered in the clearance between the arcades. After that there was deadness and silence again. I stood amazed and speechless with fear. I had the impression that I was going insane. I wake up. It was just a nightmare. With a great feeling of relief I got up and looked around me. I was in a strange city.


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