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    TheShadow is offline Member
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    Default please correct to make it sound better

    Hi,



    "When i come to visit do what you have to do, i won't keep you. Don't let me being there hold you up"

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    Default Re: please correct to make it sound better

    Quote Originally Posted by TheShadow View Post
    Hi,



    "When i come to visit do what you have to do, i won't keep you. Don't let me being there hold you up."

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    Apart from the fact that you need to capitalise "I", there's really nothing wrong with it. My only suggestion would be "Don't let me (some people will say "my") being there get in your way" instead of "hold you up".
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 18-Sep-2011 at 23:43.

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    Default Re: please correct to make it sound better

    Quote Originally Posted by TheShadow View Post
    Hi,



    "When i come to visit do what you have to do, i won't keep you. Don't let me being there hold you up"

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    In written form, how about a comma after "visit" , a period after "to do" and a new sentence with "I" (capital).

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