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    AlainK Guest

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    A colleague has contacted us about a cover letter for one of her students.
    I thought maybe some could help us in making sure this letter contains no major mistakes, or even point out some possible improvements. Here it is:

    "Currently a 5th-year student at xxxxxxx (IT expert in five years) in
    Paris France, I am looking for a 6 month internship between March and
    August 2006.

    My career objective is to work in agriculture software development.
    This internship would be a great opportunity for me to discover a
    foreign professional environment. My fluency in English, thanks to
    past experience in Ireland and the US, and my understanding of
    American culture are complementary assets to my quick integration into
    your team.

    As indicated in my resume, I have already worked for agriculture
    software development during another internship thanks to my double
    competence in viticulture and computers. I have developed a handless
    solution which can measure field surface, quite the same as the
    solution you provide. That was a great experience and it reinforces my
    desire to explore new technologies and adapt them to agricultural
    management.

    My dynamism combined with my team work skills and my passion for wine
    will make our collaboration to the study and the development of your
    products and your productivity easy.

    I look forward to hearing from you to discuss my involvement by phone
    or by e-mail.
    Sincerely,
    ..."

    Thanks for your advice.

    Alain

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    Default Re: Cover letter

    six-month internship
    As indicated in my resume- I'd cut this- if it's in the resume it's repeition, so if you want to recycle the info, don't tell me, IMO
    quite the same- I'd use 'exactly'
    quite the same- wine-making? wine sounds a bit like a consumer.

  3. #3
    AlainK Guest

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    Ta!
    Grazie mille e tutti quanti.
    Thanks a lot

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