[QUOTE=februar;813909]februar (no teacher)Please correct my ESSAY..
Many people argue that the computer revolution
has been introduced ahas brought about new challenges in our daily lives (Or: in daily life) and produces some harmful effects in children’s behaviour. Some parents start to express great concerns about the benefits the child will gain from using a computer in everyday life.
Firstly, I am convinced that the computer is of benefit to the children’s everyday
childrenlives. (Or: that children benefit from computers to their everyday lives.) It opens their eyes as they have access to the whole world and moreover, the children gain knowledge them withof the new technologies that we, as adults, use in our work or career. Children not only gather all information or any data from the internet but also wish easy access to information like aid for their study and education.
However, to what extend we must trust in this device to be handled all the time with our children. (Sentence left: I don’t know precisely what you mean) I believe that floods of internet information do invade our children’s brain and so I cannot deny the negative effects which have been produced on the daily computer users. The fact that computers are obviously damaging to both eyes and physical posture is caused by sitting for hours in front of computers. Moreover, the social skills and human communication are all affected negatively by producing isolated children with poor human interaction.
Furthermore, children are more interested in playing rather than gathering information on computer and such games are building a violent behaviour with rebellious attitude toward the society.
I could conclude that parents’ responsibility should be increased and further observation and restricted rules must be placed to guide children to the proper way of using computer in order to prevent the children from the negative effect of computers.