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    Default Please help me correct my essay

    There was no title but teacher gave me the topic sentence.

    Once I was really mad. It was a few years ago, I got in a fight with my friend at a party. I almost hit my friend if the other friends didn't stop me. My friends were surprised because it was the first time I got that rate. I brought my mad home and spoke the big voice to my parent who were complaining me about going home late. It was the worst part, I shared my angry to my parent, and they were even more angry than me. Finally, the consequence of my terrible mood was they didn't give me the money for two weeks. That time was so bad, I did terrible things, and I hope I will never be like that again.

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    Default Re: Please help me correct my essay

    Once I was really mad. It was a few years ago. I got into a fight with my friend at a party. I almost would have hit my friend if the other friends didn't hadn't stopped me. My friends were surprised because it was the first time I had gotten that irate. I brought my mad anger home and spoke in the big a loud voice to my parents who were complaining berating me about going getting home late. It was the worst part was, I shared vented my angry to anger at my parents, and then they were even more angrier than me. Finally, the consequence of my terrible mood was they didn't give me the any money for two weeks. That time was so bad, That was a bad time. I did terrible things and I hope I will never be like that again.

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