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    Smile Please help my essay! Thank you.

    I would like to write the profession of someone in my family. Please help me to correct it. Thank you.

    The profession of someone in my family is my husband. He was a director of a seafood company. He works 8 hours a day, 7 days a week. Sometimes he works until midnight when his company has a lot of products to process. He does his job by trying his best as an ability leader. He has a good relationship with his workers. When he needs to communicate with his workers, he try to gives them his advice and nice words. In family, he's also a good father and nice husband. He is important in my life.
    Yen Tran.

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    The profession of someone in my family is my husband.

    I'd remove this sentence and start like this:My husband isthe director of a seafood company. He works 8 hours a day, 7 days a week. Sometimes he works until midnight when his company has a lot of products to process. He does his job by trying his best as an able leader. He has a good relationship with his workers. When he needs to communicate with his workers, he tries to gives them his advice and encouragement. In the family, he's also a good father and nice husband. He is important in my life.

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    Default Re: Please help my essay! Thank you.

    Thank you very much!

    Yen Tran.

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