Rowdy
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Hello,
I am putting the finishing touches on my personal statement for law school and want to make sure everything is correct grammatically. I have several sentences where I am torn between the use of two words for a variety of reasons (i.e. based on present vs past tense) and I am not sure which is the most appropriate in the context of the sentence.
I have put the 2 competing words in bold-red with a separating forward slash. The highlighted yellow word is what I am currently using. PLEASE advise on which ones are correct. Thanks!:
[FONT="]1. Through a balanced diet of theorists such as Locke, Holmes, and Tocqueville I discovered abstract political and legal concepts, while Keynes, Smith, and Sharpe shaped my understanding of financial theory. A /The pursuit of edification had grown to be fundamental to my personality.[/FONT]
[FONT="]2. So as I left the doctor’s office still processing my diagnosis, its potential consequences including stroke and paralysis, I couldn’t help but walk straight to the library, to/and begin outlining my options.[/FONT]
3. [FONT="]While these ‘workarounds’ were effective, overtime I became increasingly concerned that they might also be/have been avoidable. (Also do I need quotes around workarounds?)
4. [/FONT][FONT="]During the summer prior to my junior year I decided to pour all my efforts into investigating surgical options that could conceivably/possibly cure me.
[/FONT][FONT="]5. As my doctors celebrated my physical renaissance, I redirected my time and energy toward both/ (no both) academic achievement and contemplating a career in the law.[/FONT]
I am putting the finishing touches on my personal statement for law school and want to make sure everything is correct grammatically. I have several sentences where I am torn between the use of two words for a variety of reasons (i.e. based on present vs past tense) and I am not sure which is the most appropriate in the context of the sentence.
I have put the 2 competing words in bold-red with a separating forward slash. The highlighted yellow word is what I am currently using. PLEASE advise on which ones are correct. Thanks!:
[FONT="]1. Through a balanced diet of theorists such as Locke, Holmes, and Tocqueville I discovered abstract political and legal concepts, while Keynes, Smith, and Sharpe shaped my understanding of financial theory. A /The pursuit of edification had grown to be fundamental to my personality.[/FONT]
[FONT="]2. So as I left the doctor’s office still processing my diagnosis, its potential consequences including stroke and paralysis, I couldn’t help but walk straight to the library, to/and begin outlining my options.[/FONT]
3. [FONT="]While these ‘workarounds’ were effective, overtime I became increasingly concerned that they might also be/have been avoidable. (Also do I need quotes around workarounds?)
4. [/FONT][FONT="]During the summer prior to my junior year I decided to pour all my efforts into investigating surgical options that could conceivably/possibly cure me.
[/FONT][FONT="]5. As my doctors celebrated my physical renaissance, I redirected my time and energy toward both/ (no both) academic achievement and contemplating a career in the law.[/FONT]