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    Help for my thesis statement.

    I couldn't select which of them is better. Can you help me? Thank you in advence

    1. The need for reform in the Turkish higher education can be attributed that, the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled by the current higher education system, students getting education at higher education institutions donít gain necessary qualifications, and the current higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly.
    2. The need for reform in the Turkish higher education stem from that, the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled by the current higher education system, students getting education at higher education institutions donít gain necessary qualifications, and the current higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly.

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    Re: Help for my thesis statement.

    I think two of them is useable but I want to learn which of them is better. please help

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    Re: Help for my thesis statement.

    Quote Originally Posted by ismail1991 View Post
    I couldn't select which of them is better. Can you help me? Thank you in advence

    1. The need for reform in the Turkish higher education can be attributed that (no comma) the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled by the current higher education system, students getting education at higher education institutions don’t gain necessary qualifications, and the current higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly.
    2. There is a need for reform in the Turkish higher education system from that because the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled by the current higher educaton system, students getting education at higher education institutions don’t gain necessary qualifications, and the current higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly.
    The first sentence is better. But I would not write everything in one sentence, and also change the parts of the sentence. I have made an example.

    The Turkish higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly. The need for reform in the current system can be attributed that the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled. Students getting education at higher education institutions, for example, don’t gain necessary qualifications.
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    Re: Help for my thesis statement.

    Quote Originally Posted by februar View Post
    The first sentence is better. But I would not write everything in one sentence, and also change the parts of the sentence. I have made an example.

    The Turkish higher education system has some significant flaws which must be corrected instantly. The need for reform in the current system can be attributed that the requirements of population cannot be fulfilled. Students getting education at higher education institutions, for example, donít gain necessary qualifications.
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    In my opinion, the second corrected sentence is better. But ya, don't put everything in a sentence. Split it into 2 sentences. Add a comma after "by the current higher educaton system". :)

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    Re: Help for my thesis statement.

    Thank you for your advices. I will take into account what you advised me. :D

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