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    Default Describing a place [correct it please]

    Burj Khalifa is the tallest building in the world which soars above downtown Dubai at 829.84.Construction began on 21 September 2004, with the exterior of the structure completed on 1 October 2009 and officially opened on 4 January 2010, The total cost for the project was about US$1.5 billion; and for the entire "Downtown Dubai" development, US$20 billion. Burj Khalifa has been designed to be the centrepiece of a large-scale, mixed-use development that would include 30,000 homes, nine hotels such as The Address Downtown Dubai, 3 hectares of parkland, at least 19 residential towers, the Dubai Mall, and the 12-hectare (30-acre) man-made Burj Khalifa Lake.More than 1,000 pieces of art will adorn the interiors of Burj Khalifa, while the residential lobby of Burj Khalifa will display the work of Jaume Plensa, featuring 196 bronze and brass alloy cymbals representing the 196 countries of the world. Burj Khalifa is expected to hold up to 35,000 people at any one time. A total of 57 elevators and 8 escalators are installed.
    The exterior cladding of Burj Khalifa consists of 142,000 of reflective glazing, and aluminium and textured stainless steel spandrel panels with vertical tubular fins. The cladding system is designed to withstand Dubai's extreme summer temperatures. Additionally, the exterior temperature at the top of the building is thought to be 6 C cooler than at its base Over 26,000 glass panels were used in the exterior cladding of Burj Khalifa and 300 cladding specialists from China were brought in for the cladding work on the tower.
    It's a magnet for tourism and a must-see now for everyone who comes to Dubai.

    And tell me please if this 'short article' contains the necessary and basic informations of the described place.

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    Default Re: Describing a place [correct it please]

    Quote Originally Posted by D.Alex View Post
    Burj Khalifa is the tallest building in the world which soars above downtown Dubai at 829.84.Construction began on 21 September 2004, with the exterior of the structure completed on 1 October 2009 and officially opened on 4 January 2010, The total cost for the project was about US$1.5 billion; and for the entire "Downtown Dubai" development, US$20 billion. Burj Khalifa has been designed to be the centrepiece of a large-scale, mixed-use development that would include 30,000 homes, nine hotels such as The Address Downtown Dubai, 3 hectares of parkland, at least 19 residential towers, the Dubai Mall, and the 12-hectare (30-acre) man-made Burj Khalifa Lake.More than 1,000 pieces of art will adorn the interiors of Burj Khalifa, while the residential lobby of Burj Khalifa will display the work of Jaume Plensa, featuring 196 bronze and brass alloy cymbals representing the 196 countries of the world. Burj Khalifa is expected to hold up to 35,000 people at any one time. A total of 57 elevators and 8 escalators are installed.
    The exterior cladding of Burj Khalifa consists of 142,000 of reflective glazing, and aluminium and textured stainless steel spandrel panels with vertical tubular fins. The cladding system is designed to withstand Dubai's extreme summer temperatures. Additionally, the exterior temperature at the top of the building is thought to be 6 C cooler than at its base Over 26,000 glass panels were used in the exterior cladding of Burj Khalifa and 300 cladding specialists from China were brought in for the cladding work on the tower.
    It's a magnet for tourism and a must-see now for everyone who comes to Dubai.

    And tell me please if this 'short article' contains the necessary and basic informations of the described place.
    I've just looked at a picture of the Burj Khalifa.
    How adequate your description is would depend on the exact wording of your task, but your description doesn't give much hint of what the thing looks like - and I think that is important in a description. You haven't even said what shape it is. When I finished reading, I thought you meant that sail-shaped building.
    If your passage is meant to accompany a photograph, it might be OK. Otherwise, there is something lacking.
    One other thing to consider is whether its construction date, cost, etc. are relevant in a purely "descriptive" piece. So, if this is really an exercise in "description", I'd suggest some amendments, so that the reader at least knows what it looks like.

    PS: This belongs in Editing & Writing Topics. It's not Literature.

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