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    Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Dear teachers,
    How are you?
    I have been living in Austin, TX USA since Sept.10, and still find it hard to handle daily things, for this is my first time to be abroad.
    This past Tuesday I bought a used book entitled God Says No on Amazon.com and Amazon told me that UPS would be responsible for the shipping. Then on Wednesday I tracked my package on the website of UPS and got to know that my book would be delivered to my door on Friday by end of day. Over here I live in a rental apartment on the second floor and I seldom leave my door open like the other guys do who rent other rooms in the same apartment building. I feared that the UPS deliveryman might forget to knock at the door or that I might fail to hear his knocks at the door as I might be sleeping or listening to things online at the time of his coming, so I sticked a note on the door, reading:

    Mr. UPS Deliveryman:
    Please knock at the door. I am inside. Thanks.
    Richard

    In the afternoon, the UPS deliveryman came and knocked at the door and I heard it while watching a video online. I opened the door and after signing electronically got the book. I thanked him and said "Have a good day!" to him.

    As I always urge myself to be an avid learner of English and be clear about English language points I have come across or tried to make good use of in communication, I beg you, especially native English speaking members of this forum, to do me a favor and tell me whether there is anything wrong with my note for the UPS deliveryman-- in any aspect of the language used in this note. Can I say "Mr. UPS Deliveryman" and use it as a salutation? If so, should "Deliveryman" be capitalized or should it be not? And is it proper to say "I am inside."? What would you say in this same situation? Or if you had been in my situation, what differently-phrased note would you have left on the door for the deliveryman?


    I am sure that I will learn a lot about the English language from your answers. Thanks a lot.

    Richard

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Hi Richard,
    A minor point: You stuck the note on the door.

    So, let's start with the basics. The purpose is to communicate -- and you did just that. You got your package.

    I wouldn't say "Mr. UPS Deliveryman" because women work for UPS too.
    I wouldn't say "knock on the door" because where else would you knock?

    But really, there was no need for a note at all. Even if your door was unlocked, no delivery service would EVER just open your door and just drop off the package, unless you left a note saying to do that, and that seems like a risky thing to do. (Anyone who saw the note would know your door was unlocked and could just come in.)

    UPS will usually ring the bell or knock while making a delivery. If you were afraid you would not hear them, then you could leave a note that says "Please knock loudly -- I'm inside." or "Please knock loudly -- I'm here!"
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Hi Richard,
    A minor point: You stuck the note on the door.

    So, let's start with the basics. The purpose is to communicate -- and you did just that. You got your package.

    where else would you knock?

    UPS will usually ring the bell or knock while making a delivery. If you were afraid you would not hear them, then you could leave a note that says "Please knock loudly -- I'm inside." or "Please knock loudly -- I'm here!"
    Thanks for pointing out my wrong verb form.
    A follow-up question for you: Do you mean that I should have begun my note with "Mr. UPS Deliveryman or Ms. UPS Deliverywoman", which is too long, or "UPS deliveryperson"? I googled "deliveryperson" just now and found that it is always written as "delivery person", as two words instead of one.
    My American neighbour told me that several months ago she got a pair of shoes lost but UPS said they delivered the parcel to her door and dropped it at her door. She thought it must be stolen. And this is why I thought of pasting a note on the door.
    Your versions of "Please knock loudly -- I'm inside." and "Please knock loudly -- I'm here!" are better than mine. I would never be able to think of "I'm here!"
    I love your humor in saying "where else would you knock?"

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    I think Barb was saying there was no need to address the note to anyone at all. Just say "Please knock loudly -- I am here!"

    If I were to specify who the note was for, I would probably just write:

    "UPS - Please knock loudly - I am here!"

    No need for "Dear Mr. or Ms Deliveryperson" or anything like that.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Quote Originally Posted by SoothingDave View Post
    I think Barb was saying there was no need to address the note to anyone at all. Just say "Please knock loudly -- I am here!"

    If I were to specify who the note was for, I would probably just write:

    "UPS - Please knock loudly - I am here!"

    No need for "Dear Mr. or Ms Deliveryperson" or anything like that.
    Thanks for pointing out my misunderstanding of Barb's idea, SoothingDave.
    Your version is economic in wording and saves a lot of trouble.
    Thank you.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Just for future reference, when ordering items from Amazon there is a field called "delivery instructions" on the order form. You can type in specific instructions in this space, such as "leave at manager's office" or "knock on door loudly".

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Quote Originally Posted by Ouisch View Post
    Just for future reference, when ordering items from Amazon there is a field called "delivery instructions" on the order form. You can type in specific instructions in this space, such as "leave at manager's office" or "knock on door loudly".
    Thanks for reminding me of this Amazon information. To be frank, this is just my second time to order things from Amazon(USA) since my arrival in America. When I was in China, I ordered items from www.amazon.cn whose delivery style is slightly different from here in America.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Don't worry, Richard.

    If this is the most confusing difference you find between Texas and China, you're lucky!

    I hope you're enjoying Austin otherwise. Are you starting to embrace American football?
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    Don't worry, Richard.

    If this is the most confusing difference you find between Texas and China, you're lucky!

    I hope you're enjoying Austin otherwise. Are you starting to embrace American football?
    At the end of last month, I watched the live broadcast of the game between Oklahoma and Texas on the local channel at home. I never expected that you guys are so enthusiastic about this sport. I cannot get tickets for such games at UT Stadium; I am stupid, I do not know where to buy them. To be frank, I'm not a sport fan. But I would like to be a spectator on the spot to deepen my Austin experience at least once in the future.

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    Re: Anything wrong with my note for UPS deliveryman?

    It's been said that in Texas, football is more of a religion than a pasttime.

    The Oklahoma game was ugly (if your'e a Texas fan). They did much better this week against Texas Tech.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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