[Essay] Please, check my motivation letter

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Neeka20

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:)Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Alla Lobach – originally from Ukraine. I am hereby applying for entrance to the Global Information Technology Management (GITM) at The University of XXXX for the 20XX/XX academic year.
I appreciate this opportunity to provide further information in support of my application. Currently, I am living in Kyiv, Ukraine. Graduated from Kyiv National Taras Shevchenko University in 2009 and got Master’s degree in Applied Mathematics and Social Informatics.
University of XXX offers education which is of high standard. There are wide ranges of courses provided which offer skills on Computer Programming, Management of Innovations and Management of Informational Security Issues. My decision about University of XXX is based on two main reasons. First this Master program is extremely suitable to my ability, my professional interest and my current work. The second reason for my choice originates from the well-known reputation of the highly qualified educational system of Finland. Having a chance to study in Finland means I will have opportunities to approach and experience one o the best education systems in the world.
During my last term here in Finland (15/01/2008-26/05/2008 University of Tampere, Finland) I took several courses for instance International Organizations, Public Economics, Strategic Thinking and Human Factors in Interactive Technology. Apart from being a new experience for me, these courses helped me enhance my quality of writing in my course work. Personally, I feel that Finland offers me more favorable possibilities regarding my future studies. Therefore, it would be of great advantage and privilege for me to have your permission for this massive opportunity to continue my studies here at the University of XXX.
My aim to be a professional, who combines the quality of IT specialist and business manager. Therefore I would like to gain deeper theoretical knowledge and practical experience in the field of GITM. What particularly appears to me in this course is the opportunity it will give me to fully understand the steps through which a project is finalized and made into a useful, representative and ingenious image of company.
By travelling in many countries in Europe I had the chance to improve my communication skills in other languages as well. Besides Russian and Ukrainian, my second mother tongue, I speak English and Polish. At the moment I am taking a Finnish course for beginners.
In summary, I am prepared and exited about the things waiting for me in the future. I am young, open-minded, creative, energetic, hard-working and motivated person. I am equally comfortable working alone or as part of a group. Being in new situations stimulates me and I am able to make friends easily. I am able to learn from my mistakes and any failures, ensuring that they do not happen again. I believe that participation in this program will greatly improve my development further and fulfill my potential.

Thank you in advance for considering my application.
 

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:)Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Alla Lobach – originally from the Ukraine. I am hereby applying for entrance to the Global Information Technology Management (GITM) program at The University of XXXX for the 20XX/XX academic year.

I appreciate this opportunity to provide further information in support of my application. Currently, I am living in Kyiv, Ukraine. I graduated from Kyiv National Taras Shevchenko University in 2009 and [STRIKE]got[/STRIKE] received a Master’s degree in Applied Mathematics and Social Informatics.

The University of XXX offers education which is [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] regarded as a high standard among universities. There [STRIKE]are [/STRIKE] is a wide range[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] of courses provided [STRIKE]which[/STRIKE]that offer skills [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in Computer Programming, Management of Innovations and Management of Informational Security Issues. My decision about the University of XXX is based on two main reasons. First, this Masters program is extremely suitable to my ability, my professional interest and my current work. The second reason for my choice originates from the well-known reputation of the highly qualified educational system of Finland. Having a chance to study in Finland means that I will have opportunities to [STRIKE]approach[/STRIKE] enroll in and experience one of the best education systems in the world.

At the University of Tampere, Finland I took several relevant courses; for instance, International Organizations, Public Economics, Strategic Thinking and Human Factors in Interactive Technology. Apart from being a new experience for me, these courses helped me enhance my quality of writing in my course work. Personally, I feel that Finland offers me more favorable possibilities regarding my future studies. Therefore, it would be of great advantage and privilege for me to have your permission for this [STRIKE]massive[/STRIKE] outstanding opportunity to continue my studies here at the University of XXX.

My [STRIKE]aim[/STRIKE] goal is to be a professional, who combines the [STRIKE]quality [/STRIKE] qualities of IT specialist and business manager. Therefore, I would like to gain a deeper theoretical knowledge and practical experience in the field of GITM. What particularly [STRIKE]appears[/STRIKE] appeals to me in this course is the opportunity it will give me to fully understand the steps through which a project is finalized and made into a useful, representative and ingenious image of company.

By travelling in many countries in Europe I have had the chance to improve my communication skills in other languages [STRIKE]as well[/STRIKE]. Besides Russian and Ukrainian, my second mother tongue, I speak English and Polish. At the moment I am taking a Finnish course for beginners.

In summary, I am prepared and [STRIKE]exited[/STRIKE] excited about the [STRIKE]things[/STRIKE] opportunities and challenges waiting for me in the future. I am a young, open-minded, creative, energetic, hard-working and motivated person. I am equally comfortable working alone or as part of a group. Being in new situations stimulates me and I am able to make friends easily. I am able to learn from my mistakes [STRIKE]and any failures[/STRIKE], [STRIKE]ensuring[/STRIKE] assuring that they [STRIKE]do not happen again[/STRIKE] are not repeated. I believe that participation in this program will greatly improve my development [STRIKE]further[/STRIKE] and fulfill my potential.

Thank you in advance for considering my application.

Nice work, a few suggestions. Good luck in your future. :up:
 

Neeka20

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Thank you!!!!!:-D:-D:-D:-D:-D:-D:-D:-D
 
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