Re: My Ex-Teacher
All in all, this is fine.
Originally Posted by nasserph
Look at the parts in pink. You have problems there.
Are all the students in your school boys? If so, you're fine the way you are. These days, we don't usually use "he" to mean both boys and girls.
"Together" is a rather informal word, but the rest of the essay is a bit more formal. Is there a synonym you can use?
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.