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    Default Please help me see part of my application essay.

    Please help me see if these sentences in my essay in understandable and appropriate. THANK YOU!

    1. Meanwhile, observation in classrooms gave me the impression that students who used the largest number of grammatical forms, instead of the most appropriate ones, got more praise than others.

    2. Your courses distinctively include diversity in language learners as one of its emphases, which is alsomy interest.

    3. This rewarding experience solidified my desire to teach but also revealed to me how far my students were from qualified English learners.

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    Default Re: Please help me see part of my application essay.

    Quote Originally Posted by wanglili View Post
    Please help me see if these sentences in my essay in understandable and appropriate. THANK YOU!

    1. Meanwhile, observation in classrooms gave me the impression that students who used the largest number of grammatical forms, instead of the most appropriate ones, got more praise than others. OK

    2. Your courses distinctively include diversity in (if I understand your statement, I think "among" would be better than "in") language learners as one of its emphases their main features (or "focal points" or "strong points"), which is also my interest.

    3. This rewarding experience solidified my desire to teach but also revealed to me how far my students were are from qualified English learners (what are "qualified English learners" ?).
    Suggestions.

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    Default Re: Please help me see part of my application essay.

    May I ask why should I use present tense instead of past tense in This rewarding experience solidified my desire to teach but also revealed to me how far my students were are from qualified English learners.
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    I think tenses in the same sentence should be the same. Thank you!

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    Default Re: Please help me see part of my application essay.

    Quote Originally Posted by wanglili View Post
    May I ask why should I use present tense instead of past tense in This rewarding experience solidified my desire to teach but also revealed to me how far my students were are from qualified English learners.
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    I think tenses in the same sentence should be the same. Thank you!
    Has the distance from qualified English speakers ended?

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    Default Re: Please help me see part of my application essay.

    I have stopped teaching those students. So I think this judgement happened in the past. Is it still better to use past perfect tense?
    THANKS.

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    Quote Originally Posted by wanglili View Post
    I have stopped teaching those students. So I think this judgement happened in the past. Is it still better to use past perfect tense?
    THANKS.
    "Were" or "had been" would be OK.

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    Default Re: Please help me see part of my application essay.

    Thank you, Bil!

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