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    Is there something wrong with this sentence ?

    Dear all,


    Is there something wrong with this sentence ?

    Now with several years of working on projects for fortune 500 companies as well as the experiences with collaborating with artists, she ventures on her own and started her studio. She focuses on surface design, identities, package designs and print.

    Many thanks

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    Re: Is there something wrong with this sentence ?

    Quote Originally Posted by duiter View Post
    Dear all,


    Is there something wrong with this sentence ?

    Now after several years of working on projects for Fortune 500 companies as well as the experiences with collaborating with artists, she ventures on her own and starts her [own?] studio. She focuses on surface design, identities, package designs and print.

    Many thanks
    It's unusual to write entirely in the present, but it's okay if you're consistent. You were inconsistent with "started."
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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