Re: Changes in security procedures
Your amendments are, with one exception, an improvement on the original. However, in my opinion, you have sometimes appeared to suggest that the students's language should be changed to your version. If I had been correcting it, I might have done something like the version I have added below, and then given your version as a model.
I feel that by having grammar and less-than-best expressions corrected in the same way, the learner may become disheartened., and feel that they have little hope.
Originally Posted by vectra
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