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    Default Please tell me if this short text looks good

    People perform badly when speaking in public for couple of reasons. One of them is lack of self-confidence and insufficient preparation for the speech. The other is that speakers pay too much attention to the verbal aspect of their speaking, rather than focusing on non-verbal features of the speech they are giving, which vastly prevail in how they are perceived by the audience. In other words, impression that you make on people who listen to you, is what really matters.

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    Default Re: Please tell me if this short text looks good

    to me it sounds good

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    Default Re: Please tell me if this short text looks good

    Welcome to the forum, leszkoss.
    Quote Originally Posted by leszkoss View Post
    People perform badly when speaking in public for couple of ('a couple'. Even with the correction, this sound rather informal. I'd use 'a number of') reasons. One of them is lack of self-confidence and insufficient preparation for the speech.(that's two reasons) The other is that speakers pay too much attention to the verbal aspect of their speaking, rather than focusing on non-verbal features of the speech they are giving, which vastly prevail (Sorry, but I am not sure what you mean by that) in how they are perceived by the audience. In other words, the impression that you make on people who listen to you, (no comma) is what really matters.

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    Default Re: Please tell me if this short text looks good

    Thanks for correction. And I apologize for having forgotten to introduce myself ;
    I used to learn English in high school and now I 'm taking it up again. My goal is the CAE! Writing is my biggest concern.


    Some of them is (are?) lack of self-confidence and insufficient preparation for the speech.

    ,and that mostly decides how they are perceived by the audience.
    'vastly prevail' - it doesn't sound proper? Maybe I was trying too hard to sound sophisticated.

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