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    useyyidg is offline Newbie
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    Default Our School Rules: Please, proof read!

    Hello everyone. I've just registered and need some help. I've translated our school rules and need a proof check. Could you please read them and post your comments.
    Thanks in advance.

    I come to class on time.
    I move around safely inside and outside. (actually I wanted to write "I walk (instead of running) in the school" but it doesn't seem ok)
    I solve my problems by talking and I do not harm my friends.
    I talk in my turn.
    I use the materials mindfully and sparingly.
    I keep my environment clean.

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    useyyidg is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: Our School Rules

    Hello! Please help:)

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    Default Re: Our School Rules: Please, proof read!

    Quote Originally Posted by useyyidg View Post
    Hello everyone. I've just registered and need some help. I've translated our school rules and need a proof check. Could you please read them and post your comments.
    Thanks in advance.

    I come to class on time.
    I move around safely inside and outside. (actually I wanted to write "I walk (instead of running) in the school" but it doesn't seem ok)
    I solve my problems by talking and I do not harm my friends.
    I talk in my turn.
    I use the materials mindfully and sparingly.
    I keep my environment clean.
    b.

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    Default Re: Our School Rules: Please, proof read!

    [QUOTE=useyyidg;831041]


    I talk in my turn.


    NOT A TEACHER


    (1) Of course, I am not saying that your sentence is wrong. I do not know.

    (2) It is only my opinion that "I talk in my turn" sounds strange.

    I should prefer:

    I wait for my turn to talk. / I talk when it is my turn.

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    Default Re: Our School Rules: Please, proof read!

    I agree with TheParser's emendation and would add that they would sound more natural if they began I will or I must.

    Rover

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    useyyidg is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: Our School Rules: Please, proof read!

    Thanks again. It helped a lot.

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