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She was extremely happy so she suddenly jumped up and fell down.
Is this sentence correct? I am talking about the underlined part. I want to say she couldn't control her balance and couldn't land successfully.
 

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She was so happy that she jumped up suddenly, lost her balance and and fell down.

This sentence leaves little room for doubt.
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She was extremely happy so she suddenly jumped up and fell down.


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(1) I cannot explain why, but I think that your sentence sounds a bit strange.

(a) Maybe (?) because the verbs "jumped up" and "fell down" are so close together.

(2) I would be more comfortable with:

She was extremely happy, so she suddenly jumped up and just as suddenly fell

down.


 

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She was extremely happy, so she suddenly jumped up and just as suddenly fell
down
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That will certainly work as well, Parser. Unless someone objects to too many "suddenly" being so close together.
But, I prefer your sentence to all others, so you can have a gold star and an ice-cream cone too:icecream:!
John
 

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If there's ice cream involved, then my submission is:

She jumped for joy, but botched the landing.
 

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She was extremely happy so she suddenly jumped up and fell down.
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Though this sentence sounds a little bit strange , It sounds great( to me). I don't know why .
:cool:
 

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The problem with the original is that it implies she fell down deliberately, as an intended part of her expression of joy.
 
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