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    Please help. I'm writing a something for work. But doesn't sound right to me. First post here, so hope someone can help.

    By way of letter, dated 10th October 2011, I informed you of my intent to appeal your decision. I consider such action necessary as I have identified flaws in your findings which might have affected the outcome of your investigation.

    Any help appreciated.

    James

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    Re: Sentence review

    Quote Originally Posted by james_2011 View Post
    Please help. I'm writing a something for work. But doesn't sound right to me. First post here, so hope someone can help.

    By way of letter, dated 10th October 2011, I informed you of my intent to appeal your decision. I consider such action necessary as I have identified flaws in your findings which might have affected the outcome of your investigation.

    Any help appreciated.

    James
    I would change only the beginning, "In my letter, dated 10th October 2011, I informed you of my intention..."

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    Re: Sentence review

    Quote Originally Posted by bhaisahab View Post
    I would change only the beginning, "In my letter, dated 10th October 2011, I informed you of my intention..."
    Thanks alot, my friend.

    James

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