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      • Member Type:
      • Interested in Language
      • Native Language:
      • French
      • Home Country:
      • France
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      • England

    • Join Date: Dec 2011
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    #1

    Talking Could you help me with my CV, please ?

    Hi !

    I'm french and I just arrived in Liverpool 4 days ago. I am looking for a job but my english is not very good...
    Could you help me to correct my CV please ?

    Thanks you so much !!

    Chloé DU*****
    21 years old

    Liverpool

    Tel mobile: 07979 ******
    E-mail: *****@live.fr

    Profile

    I consider myself to be an honest, trustworthy and reliable young person, smart in my appearance and quick to learn. I have a confident manner and am able to follow instructions. I enjoy working in a team and get along well with other people. I enjoy challenges and I like to keep busy and always work with the smile.

    Key Skills

    Hardworking and flexible: always willing to get stuck in and help others while available to work overtime and cover shifts when required

    Keen to learn new skills: can adapt well to new roles and pick up new skills quickly and accurately while working under pressure

    Content to work in variable conditions: work well as part of team as well as on my own initiative

    Good communications skills: able to communicate in French (first language), English and German and get on well with other while displaying a positive and professional attitude

    Computer: Competent ability to use MS office packages, Internet, E-mail and various “In-house” systems and programmes

    Work experience

    ****** BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2010 - Dec 2011
    Bar Staff
    Duties Included:
    - Operating the till and taking cash
    - Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & glasses
    - Preparing the bar for service, restocking wines, spirits, beers...
    - Mixing cocktail for customers. (Menu of thirty different cocktails)
    - Service of hot drink (tea, coffee, cappuccino, macchiato….)

    ******* BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2009 - Dec 2011
    Bar Staff
    Duties Included:
    - Operating the till and taking cash
    - Preparing the bar for service, restocking wines, spirits, beers...
    - Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & glasses
    - Organization of theme party (St Patrick, Halloween…)
    - Formation of fifteen persons

    Association PLANET TOUR; Lome, TOGO Summer 2011
    Voluntary Work
    Duties Included:
    - Teaching of Mathematic (Primary class)
    - Teaching of French
    - Children’s activities
    - Reforestation

    Education

    Equivalent Bachelor’s Degree in Biology 2009-2011
    (Speciality Animal Biology); Lille 1 University, FRANCE

    “A” level in Science with mention “Good” 2008
    College Raymond Queneau; Villeneuve d’Ascq, FRANCE

    Hobbies and personal interests

    I enjoy travelling, photography and meet new people.
    In my spare time I like listen to music and spend my time with my friends.

    Referees

    Reference available on request from:

    Most recent Employer

    Julien ********
    Director
    ******* BAR
    Lille

    Tel: 00336 ********
    Facebook: Log in | Facebook
    (****** Bar-Ambiance)

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    • Member Info
      • Member Type:
      • Retired English Teacher
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • England
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    #2

    Re: Could you help me with my CV, please ?

    The English is good. I'd change the order, so that the things that an employer are primarily interested in come first:

    Education
    Work experience
    Key Skills
    Profile
    References

    I have noted a few things I'd change. Please note that these are my personal thoughts - i do not claim to be an expert at proofreading or CVs.

    Profile
    ... I like to keep busy and always work with the a smile.

    Key Skills

    Hardworking and flexible: always willing to get stuck in and help others, while available to work overtime and cover shifts when required

    Content to work in variable conditions: work well as part of a team as well as on my own initiative

    Good communications skills: able to communicate in French (first language), English and German and get on well with others, while displaying a positive and professional attitude


    Work experience

    ****** BAR; Lille,...
    - Responsible for keeping the bar clean and tidy, collecting empty plates & and glasses...
    - Mixing cocktails for customers. (Menu of thirty different cocktails)
    - Service of Serving hot drinks (tea, coffee, cappuccino, macchiato….)

    ******* BAR; Lille, FRANCE Sep 2009 - Dec 2011...
    Ba collecting empty plates & and glasses
    - Organization of theme partyies (St Patrick's, Halloween…)
    - Formation of fifteen persons I don't understand this

    Association PLANET TOUR; ...
    - Teaching of Mathematics (Primary class)

    - Reforestation I am not sure about this. What did you actually do?

    Education

    Licence (?) (= Bachelor’s Degree) in Biology 2009-2011
    (Speciality Animal Biology); Lille 1 University, FRANCE


    Hobbies and personal interests

    I enjoy travelling, photography and meeting new people.
    In my spare time I like listen to music and spend my time with my friends.

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