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    Smile is it written correctly ?

    Hello,
    I wrote the paragraph below and wanted to check with you if it is properly written, your insights will be helpful.
    Thank you in advance,
    Luis

    Subject : “Let’s Go Viral” Campaign


    Hello Guys!
    ( insert here web address ) is now available at the University of Northern Minnesota. Meeting new people in College has never been easier... 100% free online dating. If you like the website, forward this same link to your friends. All the Best,
    The your website name Team

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    Default Re: is it written correctly ?

    Quote Originally Posted by globsticks View Post
    Hello,
    I wrote the paragraph below and wanted to check with you if it is properly written, your insights will be helpful.
    Thank you in advance,
    Luis

    Subject : “Let’s Go Viral” Campaign


    Hello Guys everyone!
    ( insert here web address ) is now available at the University of Northern Minnesota. Meeting new people in College has never been easier ... 100% free online dating. If you like the website, forward this same link to your friends. All the best,
    The your website name Team
    It's fine as an informal announcement of a new dating website. I've only made a couple of amendments:

    - Remove the word "same" before "link" (and of course you need to add the link).
    - No capital letter is required on "best"
    - I've left in the ellipsis (three dots in a row) and added a space at the beginning. However, I'm not sure you need it. I think a dash would be better.
    - I changed "guys" to "everyone". Even though "guys" is frequently used when addressing people of both sexes, the fact that this is a dating website might suggest that "guys" means it's only aimed at men.

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    Smile Re: is it written correctly ?

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    It's fine as an informal announcement of a new dating website. I've only made a couple of amendments:

    - Remove the word "same" before "link" (and of course you need to add the link).
    - No capital letter is required on "best"
    - I've left in the ellipsis (three dots in a row) and added a space at the beginning. However, I'm not sure you need it. I think a dash would be better.
    - I changed "guys" to "everyone". Even though "guys" is frequently used when addressing people of both sexes, the fact that this is a dating website might suggest that "guys" means it's only aimed at men.

    I made the suggested corrections, is it looking better now?

    Hello everyone!
    (insert here web address ) is now available at the University of Northern Minnesota. Meeting new people in College has never been easier ... 100% free online dating. If you like the website, forward this email to your friends. All the best,
    The your website name Team


    Because the website name is going to be shown as a link at the beginning , then it would be redundant to have the link inserted back again in the text. Since this text is an email I am calling it by its name so people can forward it to their friends and hope the email gets viral.

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    Default Re: is it written correctly ?

    Quote Originally Posted by globsticks View Post
    I made the suggested corrections, is it looking better now?

    Hello everyone!
    (insert here web address ) is now available at the University of Northern Minnesota. Meeting new people in College has never been easier ... 100% free online dating. If you like the website, forward this email to your friends. All the best,
    The your website name Team


    Because the website name is going to be shown as a link at the beginning , then it would be redundant to have the link inserted back again in the text. Since this text is an email I am calling it by its name so people can forward it to their friends and hope the email gets viral.
    Hello
    I am wondering if when I write :

    (insert here web address ) is now available at the University of Northern Minnesota
    is it correct to precede universities names with : The or can I say:
    (insert here web address ) is now available at University of Northern Minnesota
    or
    (insert here web address ) is now available at UNM

    so should I always write before universities names with the when the particular name allows it or should I ignore using The before universities names.

    Thanks in advance,

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