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    Hey everyone!

    Could you comment on the following sentences please?
    • According to the International Institute for Strategic Studies, the problem of globalization is directly connected to the capacity of international organizations to ensure stability and security in the world.
    • In the modern conditions ensuring security depends on finding a way of management of policies of different counties worldwide with the view of locating emerging threats. New international institutes and modern methods may be used during this process.
    • The speed with which information and money cross county’s borders erodes government’s capacity to control the country, with thousands of private sector investment causing sudden movements of capital and decline in prices.
    • The proliferation of technological know-how and the capacity to manufacture modern weapons has significantly increased the threat to security worldwide.
    • More and more states research and produce nuclear, chemical and biological weapons, for which they can now find a place on commercial markets quite easily.
    • Terrorists and drug traffickers use the latest speedy communications and information technology.
    • Globalization makes it difficult to recognize emergent crises, which leads to the situation when a developing crisis is hard to notice and it is initially unclear what this crisis will lead to.
    • International organizations need to take decisive action to manage a serious crisis.
    • Commercial gain is a strong competitor to unity. Therefore, every country should combine a multilateral approach with unilateralism and also act both on its own and with its allies.
    • Sanctions cannot be sustained. It is necessary to find a way to manage the conflict. Elaborate conditions will have to be applied to lift them.
    Thanks heaps!

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    • In the modern conditions ensuring security depends on finding a way of management of policies of different counties worldwide with the view of locating emerging threats. New international institutes and modern methods may be used during this process.
    I'd put a coma after 'conditions', and probably change the phrase to 'in the current situation'. I'd use 'to manage'. Might would work beter IMO than may.

    • The speed with which information and money cross county’s borders erodes government’s capacity to control the country, with thousands of private sector investment causing sudden movements of capital and decline in prices.
    countries' ?? governments' investments


    • Terrorists and drug traffickers use the latest speedy communications and information technology.
    speedy- too coloquial- rapid/instantaneous?
    • Globalization makes it difficult to recognize emergent crises, which leads to the situation when a developing crisis is hard to notice and it is initially unclear what this crisis will lead to.
    a situation


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    Thank you, tdol! I'd like to ask you a question:

    Do you think it's necessary to learn/study such words as unilateralism, multilateral, unity etc? They seem to be pretty rare in my mother tongue. They're used largely in mass media and regarded as formal language. Is it so in English as well?

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    In English, Iwouldn't say they were formal, and they would be used in a conversation about the subject as readily as in the media.

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