[QUOTE=deafartist;837031]Who has English skills? I want someone to correct my English and explain how to improve English.
I have written a short story:
*My name is Madeleine. I am Swedish. I am a Christian. I have strong faith in Jesus Christ. I often travel to different places in Sweden every year. I sometimes also travel to Europe. I love walking into the nature. All the beautiful things God had created.
Chapter 1* In the morning I was walking along the hill road with
a smalllittle baggage (uncountable noun) and a small purse I carried. - Or: …along the hill road carrying little baggage….
* I stopped walking. I bowed and set two bags down on the ground of the hill. – to me it’s clear that she has to bow to do that, so it’s not necessary to mention it. I rose
to stand. Or: I stood up and began to look around. What a beautiful view from the hill I could see! I saw a village that was called “ Gurburg “
I had been standing there for a few minutes. After that
a few minutesI bowed topicked the two bags up and set off for the village.
* In the village, I found a small hotel by the river she loved – who is she? I entered it. An old woman
satsitting at the desk with a blue guestbook while shewas knitting a wooly poncho. She greeted me friendly with cries of welcome.
“Should one room be free for me?” – Better: “Do you have a single room for me for 10 nights? I asked
She nodded, “Yes I still have
got itone” said she tenderly.
She put the knitting needles and the wool on the desk. She got up from the
deskchair and got a key from the key hanger. She gave it to me.
“Here is your key. You
willcan have breakfast from 8 to 9:30 every morning.” said she friendly.
“Thank you, I always get up early in the morning.” I said. “My name is Madeleine. How
couldcan I call you?”
“I am Madam Inger Bakke. We wish you have a pleasant stay in our hotel, Madeleine”, she said tenderly.
with my facemy head saying “Thank you, Madam Inger”.
I was about to walk up the staircase when Inger asked whether she
wouldshould lead me to my room. But I shook with my facemy head “No, thank you. I know mythe way.” Then I walked up.
*In the hallway I found my room. When I opened the door, I saw what furniture my room had. The room had an old bed and an old table that was beside the old bed. There was an old oil lamp on the old table. There was an old radio on the small cupboard below the window. There were two portraits on the wall of the room.
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