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    How to fix this sentence?

    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by thakur_sanjeev View Post
    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among the first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?
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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    The people who bought the first five hundred without causing a dent in their wallets certainly included a number of tech savvy people. I am not sure about the relevance of the words I have underlined.

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    The people who bought the first five hundred without causing a dent in their wallets certainly included a number of tech savvy people. I am not sure about the relevance of the words I have underlined.
    Thanks. "Dent in the wallet" to me means something that did not cost me much. There is no formal idiom like this but I sure this being used (searched in google).

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    I know the expression; it just didn't seem relevant to the sentence as a whole.

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by thakur_sanjeev View Post
    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?
    Just a rephrase to make 500 refer to products and not people:
    "There sure is tech savvy among the crowd who bought the first lot of five hundred products without causing a big dent in their wallets."

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Just a rephrase to make 500 refer to products and not people:
    "There sure is tech savvy among the crowd who bought the first lot of five hundred products without causing a big dent in their wallets."
    Shouldn't there be a 'the' before 'tech savvy'?

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Shouldn't there be a 'the' before 'tech savvy'?
    No. In English we don't normally use an article before an abstract noun.
    "There is technical understanding (tech savvy) among the crowd"

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    No. In English we don't normally use an article before an abstract noun.
    "There is technical understanding (tech savvy) among the crowd"
    Oh, I was thinking about 'the people who are tech savvy' (adjective) - the tech savvy

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    Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Oh, I was thinking about 'the people who are tech savvy' (adjective) - the tech savvy
    I see. That's right. You could say "The tech savvy were among the crowd who bought ..."
    The initial example was not good, so there are a few different understandings you could take from it.

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