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    Default How to fix this sentence?

    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by thakur_sanjeev View Post
    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among the first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?
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    The people who bought the first five hundred without causing a dent in their wallets certainly included a number of tech savvy people. I am not sure about the relevance of the words I have underlined.

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    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    The people who bought the first five hundred without causing a dent in their wallets certainly included a number of tech savvy people. I am not sure about the relevance of the words I have underlined.
    Thanks. "Dent in the wallet" to me means something that did not cost me much. There is no formal idiom like this but I sure this being used (searched in google).

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    I know the expression; it just didn't seem relevant to the sentence as a whole.

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by thakur_sanjeev View Post
    I see something wrong with the sentence below. I have written this in an article I am currently working on.

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.


    Here five hundred means lot of <products> and not people. How do I rephrase it?
    Just a rephrase to make 500 refer to products and not people:
    "There sure is tech savvy among the crowd who bought the first lot of five hundred products without causing a big dent in their wallets."

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    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Just a rephrase to make 500 refer to products and not people:
    "There sure is tech savvy among the crowd who bought the first lot of five hundred products without causing a big dent in their wallets."
    Shouldn't there be a 'the' before 'tech savvy'?

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    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Shouldn't there be a 'the' before 'tech savvy'?
    No. In English we don't normally use an article before an abstract noun.
    "There is technical understanding (tech savvy) among the crowd"

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    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    No. In English we don't normally use an article before an abstract noun.
    "There is technical understanding (tech savvy) among the crowd"
    Oh, I was thinking about 'the people who are tech savvy' (adjective) - the tech savvy

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Oh, I was thinking about 'the people who are tech savvy' (adjective) - the tech savvy
    I see. That's right. You could say "The tech savvy were among the crowd who bought ..."
    The initial example was not good, so there are a few different understandings you could take from it.

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