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    thakur_sanjeev is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Thankyou everyone. This was first query here and now I know who to turn to when in doubt.

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by 5jj View Post
    I know the expression; it just didn't seem relevant to the sentence as a whole.
    I will revisit this but there is some contextual information before this line in the article, so it does not look bad as a whole. Thanks.

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    Just a rephrase to make 500 refer to products and not people:
    "There sure is tech savvy among the crowd who bought the first lot of five hundred products without causing a big dent in their wallets."
    I agrees its about the first 500 products purchased by tech savvy people

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    Default Re: How to fix this sentence?

    Could the problem be with tenses?

    There sure is tech savvy crowd among first lot of five hundred who bought <product> without causing big dent in their wallet.
    My try:
    There sure was the tech savvy crowd who were among the first 500 to buy the product without causing a big dent in their wallets.

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    There sure is the tech savvy crowd who will be among the first 500 to buy the product, without making a dent in their wallets.

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