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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?
essay : (260 words)
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Like any other issue, a change has its two faces like the double-edged sword, however, because of some scares people usually think about the drawback of it. That leads to the matter that some people do not want to undergo a modification in their lives even if it is necessary. And that is the source of many problems.
The reasons why some people detest changes are various and varied. For instance, some individuals are used to a certain style of life, especially the older ones. Moreover, some of them might keep
intheir mind on defensive thinking or some old-fashioned rules which make them follow the old tracks in doing everything as usual. Being scared by some unsure modifications is also a typical reason. They may have to change their job or their familiar surroundings they live in etc. if the innovation happens.
Although reasons are many, the result seems to be only (What do you mean?). Getting bored in life is an obvious consequence even though, people might have the feeling of safety, but along with it life is boring. More serious, if people don't open to new things, they will not be able to move with the times. From day to day, these ones will become lonely and useless in the society.
From my point of view, people should be flexible and active. Each individual should open their mind to receive new things. Avoiding negative changes is necessary, but accepting positive alternations is also the first requisite to success. We canít deny the importance of changes. People should think about the benefits of innovations even if they have to accept a reasonable risk. So,
thatevaluating pros and cons when planning something new is very important.
In conclusion, I want to
reemphasize once again the need of alternation in our lives. Fact is that humankind cannot develop without any innovations.
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