Please help me to correct these sentences

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This is to inform you that no guaranty letter / employment certificate will be issued for bank loans. Please be aware that the bank account is opened for those staff members only to ease the difficulty of salary distributing matters. This will be used only for salary transfer matters. Therefore, no loan request will be entertained.
 

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This is to inform you that no guaranty letter / employment certificate will be issued for bank loans. Please be aware that the bank account is opened for those staff members only to ease the difficulty of salary [STRIKE]distributing[/STRIKE] distribution matters. This will be used only for salary transfer matters. Therefore, no loan request will be entertained.
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  • What is the difference between “guaranty letter” and “employment certificate”?
  • Does the first sentence (“This is to inform you...”) relate to “the bank account” in the second sentence?
    • If so, why does the last sentence (“no loan”) contradict the first sentence (“for bank loans”)?
  • What does “this” refer to in the 3rd sentence?
  • How does “salary distributing matters” differ from “salary transfer matters”?
 

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This is to inform you that no guaranty letter / employment certificate will be issued for bank loans(Do you mean bank loan application?). Please be aware that the bank accounts [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] are opened for those staff members only to ease the difficulty of salary distribution matters.(1) This will be used only for salary transfer matters(2) . Therefore, no loan request will be entertained.

I take it that this is a letter from the employer to the staff.
The parts underlined are a bit confusing.
1 - I think you mean ' to facilitate salary payment (by the company to the staff)'.
2. Don't salary distribution and salary transfer mean the same thing - the company crediting money to the staff's account?
 

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Thank you for your reply.

This is the a letter from the employer to the staff. The employer will not give any gurranty letter or employement certificate for the bank loan application. The bank accounts are opened for the facilitation of salary payment. So. I can write as follows.
This is to inform you that no guaranty letter / employment certificate will be issued for bank loan application. Please be aware that the bank accounts are opened for those staff members only to facilitate their salary payment. Therefore, no loan request will be entertained.
 
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