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    what is this

    i was trying to write something special and i came with this and i think it is full of mistakes could you tell me what wrong with it


    Walking slowly like he doesn’t know where to go. Looking down like someone who lost something. Suddenly he stops and his head is high now

    thanks

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    Re: what is this

    I'd make it a single sentence really as there's only one main verb:

    Walking slowly like he doesn’t know where to go, looking down like someone who lost something, suddenly he stops and his head is high now.

    Some would prefer 'as if' instead of the first 'like'

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