please help to edit my letter

[chiko]

Hi all members of this forum , iam new and I really need to learn english through this forum, my english is not very good. Two moths ago I have completed my degree study and I have decided to write a letter to my employer to inform him and submit my transcript.The following is letter so help me to edit.

Dear Manager,

RE: SUBMITTION OF MY ACADEMIC TRANSCIPT

Please the heading above refer,

I am pleased to inform you that I have successful completed my Bachelor Degree in Pschylogy at St John Univerisity. I would like thank you so much for your support during my study. your support is highly appreciated.
I have submitted my academic transcript for your further steps.
Thanks again for your time and consideration.
yours faithfully,
chiko.

 

[tedtmc]

Hi all members of this forum , iam new and I really need to learn english through this forum, my english is not very good. Two moths ago I have completed my degree study and I have decided to write a letter to my employer to inform him and submit my transcript.The following is letter so help me to edit.

Dear Manager, (better to address Mr xxx)

RE: SUBMITTION OF MY ACADEMIC TRANSCIPT
Submission of Academic Transcript (don't use all block letters)
[STRIKE]Please the heading above refer,[/STRIKE]

I am pleased to inform you that I have successfully completed my Bachelor Degree in Pschylogy at St John Univerisity. I would like to thank you so much for your support during my study and I greatly appreciate it.. [STRIKE]your support is highly appreciated.[/STRIKE]

I [STRIKE]have submitted [/STRIKE] attach herewith my academic transcript for your further [STRIKE]steps.[/STRIKE] action/perusal.

Thanks again for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Chiko.

You should know that certain letters like the first letter in a sentence and your name are to be capitalized.
Don't be stingy with space in a letter.

 

[chiko]

Oh thanks very much Tedtmc for your support