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    A composition

    Hi:
    Pls read the following composition which has an explosive topic, pls see the comments in parenthesis, grammatical mistakes or a better way of saying it in English . Tks in advance.

    Since my child was six years old, Mrs. B started calling him stupid (in the best scenery) and other humiliating words (she have done it even in front of me and without any provocation before those insults) just because a plastic ball had fallen inside her front yard.

    During these years Mrs. B have continued insulting all the neighbors. Her personality has been regarded by the neighborhood as of a person who is out of his mind (What is the best English expression for the previous statement?). All the children who have dared to play in front of her house have received her insults. Every time a softball have fallen inside her front yard she had never returned the ball even thought the children have begged her to return. :P

    Recently she has passed from words to physical violence showing a knife to the kids.

    Mrs. B is now harvesting what she has grown during these years. (What is the best English expression for the previous sentence?). The children have grown and donít respect her anymore because she has never respected them. My instruction to my son, who is now 13 years old, is not to respond to any of her offences. . A mother.

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    Re: A composition

    That is not bad, but you are right that it does need some help. :wink:

    Since my child was six years old, Mrs. B started calling him stupid (in the best scenery) and other humiliating words (she have done it even in front of me and without any provocation before those insults) just because a plastic ball had fallen inside her front yard.
    • Since my child was six years old, Mrs. B has been calling him "stupid" and using other derogatory language. She has even done it in front of me--once just because a plastic ball had fallen inside her front yard. She also has done it without any apparent provocation.


    You could also say it like this:

    • Since my child was six years old, Mrs. B has been calling him "stupid" and and other bad names. She has even done it in front of me--once just because a plastic ball had fallen inside her front yard. She also has done it without any apparent provocation.


    I'll post more later. (It's past my bedtime.)

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    Re: A composition

    During these years Mrs. B have continued insulting all the neighbors. Her personality has been regarded by the neighborhood as of a person who is out of his mind (What is the best English expression for the previous statement?). All the children who have dared to play in front of her house have received her insults. Every time a softball have fallen inside her front yard she had never returned the ball even thought the children have begged her to return.

    Recently she has passed from words to physical violence showing a knife to the kids.
    • During these years Mrs. B has been insulting all the neighbors. She has long been regarded by the entire neighborhood as a person who is out of her mind. All the children who have dared to play in front of her house have received her insults. Every time a softball has fallen in her front yard she has never returned it even though the children have begged her to do so.

      Recently, things have taken a turn for the worse. She recently threatened the kids with violence, displaying a knife.


    :)

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    Re: A composition

    Mrs. B is now harvesting what she has grown during these years. (What is the best English expression for the previous sentence?). The children have grown and donít respect her anymore because she has never respected them. My instruction to my son, who is now 13 years old, is not to respond to any of her offences.
    • Mrs. B is now reaping what she soeed durint all thoise years. She has no friends. Nobody will talk to her. The children don't respect her, because she has never respected them. My instruction to my son, who is now 13 years old, is not to respond to any of her offences. She is a poor, pathetic old soul. I almost feel sorry for her. I almost do, but I don't.


    What do you think?

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    Mrs. B is now reaping what she sowed during all those years

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    Thank you for your contributions to improve my English which are really great. The sad thing about my composition is that is not a fiction story.

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    She sounds a lot worse than my neighbours.

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    Quote Originally Posted by tdol
    Mrs. B is now reaping what she sowed during all those years

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    I will have to use the spell-checker more often.

    :wink:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mariaeuge14
    Thank you for your contributions to improve my English which are really great. The sad thing about my composition is that is not a fiction story.
    You are quite welcome, and I am glad you think all my contributions are improvements. I am afraid I allowed myself a little creativity with the interpretation, but you may, of course, do with it whatever you want.

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