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    Please need essay correction

    Hi Teachers,
    Could you correct this essay please?

    "Cars should be banned from the centres of all major cities."
    In Barcelona, for example, the city centre is full of cars, which give a very bad view of the city to the people who go shopping, so I think cars should be banned from the city centres of important cities.
    Firstable, I think more public transport (eg. Buses, taxis...) should be promoted because this gives money to the city and, for example the buses transport more people than a private car.
    In my view I think the councils should regulate the areas, in which the private cars could go. Most people believe that these areas should be in the city centre but I think these territories shouldn’t be in the city centre.
    Finally, I think councils should think and talk about this topic because this could give more prestige to the city, so more people would go to the city centre to go shoping or to visit this area.
    Thanks in advance

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    Re: Please need essay correction

    Nicely written.
    But I think it is not an essay. Maybe a commentary .
    Thank you.


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    Re: Please need essay correction

    Quote Originally Posted by sumon. View Post
    Nicely written.
    But I think it is not an essay. Maybe a commentary .
    Thank you.

    Hi,
    Thank you.
    Are you a teacher?

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    Red face Re: Please need essay correction

    No, sir/ma'am.
    I am a student of English.

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    Re: Please need essay correction

    Quote Originally Posted by sumon. View Post
    No, sir/ma'am.
    I am a student of English.
    Hi sumon,
    Thank you for your reply, but I'm looking for an English teacher in order to correct the essay. In fact one of my students wrote it and I've already correct it. That's why I'm asking for help. I need to know if it is well done.

    Best,
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    Re: Please need essay correction

    Hi Gillnetter,
    Thank you so much for your such a detailed correction and great commentaries.

    Best,
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    Last edited by learning54; 03-Mar-2012 at 09:06.

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