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    Default Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    *I am questioning my old beliefs (including but not limited 2 religion)..and it's hard 2 do with ur friends and family following you..it's much easier 2 spread knowledge and get people 2 question theirs.

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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    Quote Originally Posted by Alanoud View Post
    *I am questioning my old beliefs (including but not limited 2 religion)..and it's hard 2 do with ur friends and family following you..it's much easier 2 spread knowledge and get people 2 question theirs.
    Hi Alanoud, and welcome to Using English.

    Since you are obviously interested in correct English, please start by forgetting everything you have seen in chat rooms. 2, plzzz and ur are not words. To, please, and your are words.

    Additinally, ... is a real punctuation mark, but it's used to show that words were omitted. Using .. is not a real punctuation mark, and using ... to show a vague shift in thought is not standard English either.

    Please rewrite what you've give us with only real words and with proper punctuation, ending a sentence where needed and starting a new one with a capital letter.

    Then we'll be happy to take a look.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Help me correct this sentence

    *I am questioning my old beliefs (including but not limited to religion),and it's hard to do with your friends and family following you,it's easier to spread knowledge ,and get people to question theirs.



    I hope this is okay!

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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by Alanoud View Post
    *I am questioning my old beliefs (including, but not limited to, religion),and it's hard to do this with your friends and family following you,.spaceiIt's easier to spread knowledge ,and to get people to question theirs.
    That's my opinion. Others may have different thoughts. If you have questions about any of my changes, don't hesitate to ask.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Alanoud View Post
    *I am questioning my old beliefs (including, but not limited to, religion), (space after comma) and it's hard to do with your friends and family following you. It's easier to spread knowledge (no comma) and to get people to question theirs (I'm not sure if you mean "their knowledge" or "their beliefs").

    I hope this is okay!
    My suggestions are above. They're much the same as 5jj's, I think, but I've added a couple of spaces after commas and, as you can see, I'm not quite clear what "theirs" referred to.

    If you meant "It's easier to spread knowledge and to get people to question their knowledge" then "theirs" is fine.

    If you meant "It's easier to spread knowledge and to get people to question their beliefs" then I think you need to say "their beliefs".

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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    Sorry, I missed the spaces after the commas. I agree with emsr2d2 about 'theirs'. I assumed that it referred to 'knowledge, but I now suspect you may have meant it to refer to 'beliefs'.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    thank you guys you all have been very helpful,and yes i am referring to beliefs

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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    Quote Originally Posted by Alanoud View Post
    Thank you guys, you all have been very helpful (no comma) and, yes, I am referring to beliefs.
    You're welcome. Please remember that it's important on this forum to use correct written English.

    Have a look at my amendments above and note the use of capitalisation and punctuation. Before you hit the Submit button, always re-read your own posts to make sure they're written as correctly as possible.

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    Default Re: Help me correct this sentence plzzz

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Before you hit the Submit button, always re-read your own posts to make sure they're written as correctly as possible.
    Good advice. I wish I could remember to flloow it.
    Please do not edit your question after it has received a response. Such editing can make the response hard for others to understand.


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