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    Default "slowly driven cars"

    I wrote an essay for my writing class and one of the sentence of it was - "Slowly driven cars have less chance to make so many harmful damages."

    I was told that the part "slowly driven cars" is wrong and sounds artificial. What do you think?

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    There is nothing wrong with "Slowly driven cars" as the subject.

    Here's another example:

    Brightly colored clothes will be in this summer.


    It's the rest of your sentence that doesn't make sense.

    The entire thought could have been worded differently.

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    That's a good example. Thanks. But what is wrong with the rest of the sentence?

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    [not a teacher]

    Some ideas:

    Deleted. I'll post them later.
    Last edited by BobSmith; 20-Jan-2012 at 18:31.

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Quote Originally Posted by spongie View Post
    That's a good example. Thanks. But what is wrong with the rest of the sentence?
    "Slowly driven cars are less likely to...."
    Now you try to rewrite the rest.

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Hints:
    - damages sounds strange in that context.
    - make+damages don't really go together there.
    I hope it helps

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause so many damages.

    How about now? Maybe "harmful damages" also sounds weird because damage itself is harmful.

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Quote Originally Posted by spongie View Post
    Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause so many damages.

    How about now? Maybe "harmful damages" also sounds weird because damage itself is harmful.
    not a teacher
    Use damage as a uncountable noun.
    I don't think so.
    Damage itself is not harmful if we consider it physical harm that doesn't cause harm.
    Ref:http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/damage_1
    Last edited by sumon.; 21-Jan-2012 at 06:29. Reason: a mistake

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Much better.

    Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause serious/severe damage.

    Hope it helps

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    Default Re: "slowly driven cars"

    Quote Originally Posted by BobSmith View Post
    [not a teacher]

    Some ideas:

    Deleted. I'll post them later.

    bhaisahab and sumon. like this.
    Ahh, I love it when I'm liked for shutting up!

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