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    To native English teachers only: please read my translation of an Chinese speech and see if it makes sense to you and correct any mistake that present itself. Thank you all very much!

    There are two main ways of living. One is to live like a grass. Even though you are alive and growing up all the time, you are no more than a grass. You cannot grow tall enough no matter how much rain and sunshine you have taken in. You are unlikely to escape the fate of being trod by others who would never suffer because of your suffering. Being trod, you receive no pity from others for the simple reason that nobody actually has taken notice of you.
    Therefore, every one of us should choose to grow like a tree. Even though at present we are nothing more than a seed of a tree , trod into the mud, we still can grow up , taking in the nutrients from the soil. You may not be able to grow tall enough in a couple of years. However, you are sure to be a tall tree in eight , ten or twenty yearsí time.
    Standing as a tree tall enough, you are noticed even from a long distance. When people approach you, you give them green and shade, being useful to them. Once they leave you and look back at you , they will still find you a piece of beautiful scenery on the horizon. To be a tree, being beautiful when alive and useful though dead, is the purpose and standard of growing up for each young man.
    You are in real trouble when you live for others, because people have different standards. You cannot safeguard your dignity and self-esteem if you give up your dreams and pursuit, because you are swayed all the time.
    Then, what is the best way to safeguard our dignity and self-esteem ? You need to have a dream which you dare to chase from scratch. For example, you want to take my place and be the CEO of the New Oriental Training School. Can you fulfill the dream ? Yes, you can if you have a sound state of mind , good enough working methods and broad minds.
    Whoever wants to succeed at once is like those building houses on the sand. The houses are sure to collapse because of the lack of solid foundation. Only those who build up their success step by step , making a good foundation before proceeding to the next stage, can really achieve success.
    Once you have decided what you are going to do for your whole life, you should stick to it, never to change your mind, just like a river which flows and widens its way instead of dreaming of turning into another river or a mountain. With such a focus in life, you will not be swayed again and lose yourself in the vast sea of opportunities. Only then can you succeed.
    A very important ability that we all need in our future life is the ability to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load. Many celebrities will have to face a lot of ugly things that are hard to swallow. However, if they are to succeed, they have to swallow them all.
    Why? It is because if you donít have the ability to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load, you wonít have the time and space needed for your future development. If you want to grow stronger and thrive more, you have to leave enough time and space for yourself. If you are working hard towards an ambitious purpose, you have to clear your mind of any disturbance. And for that purpose, you need to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load.
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    Quote Originally Posted by flowerseed View Post
    To native English teachers only: please read my translation of an Chinese speech and see if it makes sense to you and correct any mistake that present itself. Thank you all very much!

    There are two main ways of living. One is to live like a grass. Even though you are alive and growing up all the time continue to grow, you are no more than a grass. You cannot grow tall enough no matter how much rain and sunshine you have taken in absorbed. You are unlikely to escape the fate of being trod upon by others who would never suffer because of your suffering. Being trod upon, you receive no pity from others for the simple reason that nobody actually has taken notice of you.
    Therefore, every one of us should choose to grow like a tree. Even though at present we are nothing more than a seed of a tree , trod into the mud, we still can grow up , taking in the nutrients from the soil. You may not be able to grow tall enough in a couple of years. However, you are sure to be a tall tree in eight , ten or twenty yearsí time.
    Standing as a tree tall enough, you are noticed even from a long distance. When people approach you, you give them green and comfort in the shade, being useful to them. Once they leave you and look back at you , they will still find you a piece of beautiful scenery on the horizon. To be a tree, being beautiful when alive and useful though dead even in death, is the purpose and standard of growing up for each young man person.
    You are in real trouble when you live for others, because people have different standards. You cannot safeguard your dignity and self-esteem if you give up your pursuit of your dreams and pursuit, because if you are swayed all the time.
    Then, what is the best way to safeguard our dignity and self-esteem ? You need to have a dream which you dare to chase from scratch the start. For example, you want to take my place and be the CEO of the New Oriental Training School. Can you fulfill the dream ? Yes, you can if you have a sound state of mind , good enough working methods and a broad minds.
    Whoever wants to succeed at once is like those building houses on the sand. The houses are sure to collapse because of the lack of a solid foundation. Only those who build up their success step by step , making a good foundation before proceeding to the next stage, can really achieve success.
    Once you have decided what you are going to do for your whole life, you should stick to it, never to change your mind, just like a river which flows and widens its way instead of dreaming of turning into another river or a mountain. With such a focus in life, you will not be swayed again and lose yourself in the vast sea of opportunities. Only then can you succeed.
    A very important ability that we all need in our future life is the ability to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load. Many celebrities will have to face a lot of ugly things that are hard to swallow. However, if they are to succeed, they have to swallow them all.
    Why? It is because if you donít have the ability to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load, you wonít have the time and space needed for your future development. If you want to grow stronger and thrive more, you have to leave enough time and space for yourself. If you are working hard towards an ambitious purpose, you have to clear your mind of any disturbance. And for that purpose, you need to swallow the humiliation and bear the heavy load.
    Just a few suggestions without (I hope) changing the theme.

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    Thank you very much, billmcd! I appreciate your help~

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