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    Post INDEPENDENT ESSAY FOR TOEFL

    Hi this is my first essay public in this web site, can you correct it? thanks
    STATEMENT
    People attend college or university for many different reasons ( for example,
    new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think
    people attend college or university ? use specific reasons and examples to
    support your answer?
    ESSAY
    I think that the people go to the college or university to
    performance her/his careers, some reasons of them are:
    to understand and amplify the knowledge in a determined area,
    to explore a different life experience, to organize the
    ideas and preference in a determined topic, to meet with people
    interested in the same subject, to investigated an specific area,
    to have better income in the future. For me these are the people
    who are interested in studying a career in a formal high level education.

    When the people are in the high school have some inclined for a specific
    issues, but don't have the enough knowledge about the topic, so he/she
    decide to understand and tried to find the career that she/he really like.
    We need to have a process and learn a lot of subjects that helps us to
    establish our preferences. The university is a new way to perceive the
    world, in this place we can have the tools to confront a problem, we have to
    teachers, equipments, classmates that can help us to understand the problem
    that we need to solve.

    Research is important to make a developed country is another impulse
    that the students have to do better things and contribute in the
    progress of the country. In the university we can find people that are
    interested in the same issues and we can make associations to solve
    some problematic in the society. The last aspect is the income if you have the
    knowledge over something you can find a job or make a specific company and raise
    the revenues.

    Finally the people which attend to the university contributed to the
    society and helps with his/her country developed. Her/his life
    styles get better, so the individual condition changes and shows us
    new, renewable and creative ideas, laws, process, created jobs and more conditions that
    help with the progress of the community.

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    Default Re: INDEPENDENT ESSAY FOR TOEFL

    Hi this is my first essay public in this web site, can you correct it? Thanks

    STATEMENT
    People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example
    new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge). Why do you think
    people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to
    support your answer?


    ESSAY
    I think that the people go to the college or university to performance her/his their careers. Some reasons of them are:

    - to understand and amplify the deepen the knowledge in a determined area
    - to explore a different life experience - to organize the ideas and preferences in a determined topic to meet with people interested in the same subject - to investigated investigate a specific area,
    - to have better income in the future.
    For me these are those people who are interested in studying a career oriented skills in through a formal high level education.

    When the these people are in the high school have some inclined for show a tendency toward a specific issues issue, but don't only have the enough limited knowledge about the topic, so he/she they decide have taken the chance to understand and tried try to find the career that she/he they really like.

    We need to have a process and learn a lot of subjects that helps help us to establish our preferences. The university is a new way to perceive the world. In this place we can have the tools to confront a problem we have to such as teachers, classmates and appropriate equipment classmates that can help us to understand the problem that we need to solve.

    Research is important to make a developed country and this is another impulse for people to attend a college or university. It motivates students have to do better useful things and contribute in to the progress of the country. In the university we can find people that are interested in the same issues and we can make associations to solve some problematic in the society. The last aspect is the income -- if you have the knowledge over something you can find a job or even make establish a specific company and raise the revenues.

    Finally it can be said that the people which who attend to the university contributed contribute to the society and helps help with his/her their countryís developed development. Her/his Their lifestyles lifestyle get better, so the individual condition changes and shows us new, renewable and creative ideas, laws, processes, created jobs and more conditions that help with the progress of the community.

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    thank you very much.

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