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    Could you please correct my English?

    This is an IELTS writing article. Could you please correct my English? Thank you in advance!

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    Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Do you agree or disagree.

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    Some feminists go to the extremely to say that universities should accept same percentage of male and female in all the subjects. It seemingly reveals this policy will guard the fight of females, but in fact, it is not a reasonable suggestion.

    Female and male have natural difference. Women are more talented in language and are more conscientious than male. So in the classes of language learning and nursing, you will find the girls’ number is far more than boys’. In the other hand men is more sensitive in math, they are more suitable to learn subjects like accounting. If the schools carry on the policy that number of male and female students should be equal, some girls will not be able to enter their favorite subject for they should make room for male students. What is more, some girls have to learn math and science which they may not good at it.

    In my opinion, universities could limit the total number of a subject for the teaching resource is finite but the percentage of gender should not be a standard for enroll students. Universities just need to compile some different demands which could measure whether a student has enough ability to learn the courses. No matter men or women as long as they could satisfy the requirements of the subjects, they could choose to learn it.

    In conclusion, the claim that every subject should accept equal numbers of male and female students is not a logical proposal, rather than protect girls’ right, it will disrupt the order of education.

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    Re: Could you please correct my English?

    Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

    Some feminists go to the extremely to say that universities should accept same percentage of male and female students in all the subjects. It seemingly reveals This policy will guard the fight seems to safeguard the rights of females, but in fact, it is not a reasonable suggestion.

    Female and male have natural differences. Women are generally more talented in languages and are more conscientious than male men. So in the classes of for subjects like language learning and nursing, you will find the girls’ number is far more than boys’ that the girls outnumber the boys. In On the other hand, men boys is more sensitive in math are better in maths. They are more suitedable to learning subjects like accounting. If the schools carry on adopt the policy that the number of male and female students should be equal, some girls will not be able to enter take their favorite subject for they should make room as they would have give the chance to for the male students who are better in the subject. What is more, some girls would have to learn maths and science which they may not be good at it.

    In my opinion, universities couldshould limit the total number of students for a subject for as the teaching resources is finite limited but the percentage of gender proportion of each sex should not be a standard for enrolling students. Universities just need to compile some different demands make an assessment which could measure of whether a student has enough ability to learn follow the courses. No It does not matter whether they are men or women as long as they could can satisfy the requirements of the subjects, they could choose to learn it. should be given the chance to take the subject.

    In conclusion, the claim that every subject should accept equal numbers of male and female students is not a logical proposal,. Rather than protecting females' right, it will would disrupt the order system of education.

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    Re: Could you please correct my English?

    Quote Originally Posted by tedtmc View Post
    Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Do you agree or disagree?

    Some feminists go to the extremely to say that universities should accept same percentage of male and female students in all the subjects. It seemingly reveals This policy will guard the fight seems to safeguard the rights of females, but in fact, it is not a reasonable suggestion.

    Female and male have natural differences. Women are generally more talented in languages and are more conscientious than male men. So in the classes of for subjects like language learning and nursing, you will find the girls’ number is far more than boys’ that the girls outnumber the boys. In On the other hand, men boys is more sensitive in math are better in maths. They are more suitedable to learning subjects like accounting. If the schools carry on adopt the policy that the number of male and female students should be equal, some girls will not be able to enter take their favorite subject for they should make room as they would have give the chance to for the male students who are better in the subject. What is more, some girls would have to learn maths and science which they may not be good at it.

    In my opinion, universities couldshould limit the total number of students for a subject for as the teaching resources is finite limited but the percentage of gender proportion of each sex should not be a standard for enrolling students. Universities just need to compile some different demands make an assessment which could measure of whether a student has enough ability to learn follow the courses. No It does not matter whether they are men or women as long as they could can satisfy the requirements of the subjects, they could choose to learn it. should be given the chance to take the subject.

    In conclusion, the claim that every subject should accept equal numbers of male and female students is not a logical proposal,. Rather than protecting females' right, it will would disrupt the order system of education.

    Tedtmc, thank you very much! Happy spring festival!

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