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Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion?
Television is one of the greatest inventions of the present scientific achievements. By the advent of television, the latest news of events that happen
ed(general statement: Simple Present – or: events happening in...) in the one part of the globe reach another part of the globe within a few seconds. By the end of 2000, television has become a primary source of mass communication and people across the counties (countries, globe?) not only depend edon their television for the news but also for entertainment.
s, many multinational companies invested a lot in thecreating television programs that glue the audience from watchingto the television watching them. During the holidays, people used to go to their friends’ or relatives’ house for vacation. Nowadays, people like to stay in their home and watch their favorite program with their family. Consequently, it reduces the chance of meeting our friends and it has destroyed the communication among our friends or relatives.
Earlier(“Used to go” means “earlier we usually went”) We used to enjoy going together for theto football matches together with our friends and relatives. There we used to(It isn’t necessary to repeat “used to”) had a nice time with them and got new friends by meeting each other. Nowadays, people used to having (familiar with) a television with High Definition Streaming Program streamingat their home; good quality streaming with laziness make people tostay in their home. Due to that, people had lostlose their opportunity to spend time with their friends.
Hence, we would say television has destroyed communication among friends and family.
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