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Hello! Good day to everybody!! Please help me correct and give me some advices, thanks.
"This hotel report assignment is rather an interesting assignment and Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is really an exciting choice with us. After enter hotel to find information about it, we find that hotel has many interesting things. It is a hotel that is a selection correct for everybody. Due to this assignment, we have more understand about hotel also services industry in Vietnam now. We write about name, location, history, number of rooms, kind of room, organizational chart, services and facilities and so on. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel brings satisfied and comfortable for tourists with modern services, style professional service and especially, Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is the newest in 6 Rising Dragon Palace Hotel systems. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is one of the good 2 stars or 3 stars hotel system at Quarter Old now. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is an attraction places for tourism action.
After completing this assignment, we are really known that Rising Dragon Palace Hotel will bring new impression about systems hotel in Hanoi. Having many problems is concentrated by us. Maybe, doing this assignment is really a difficult thing with us because we have to overcome many challenges. For example, we have to spend much time on finding information about this hotel. After finding about hotel to know about places and kind of hotel, we have to go to the hotel together. There are many hotel but we don’t allow enter the hotel so we must go many places. Due to skill and good communicate of group; we can find “Rising Dragon Palace Hotel”. Moreover, member of groups lives far with each other, transportation is very difficult and disadvantage so we are very difficult to meet. We find that we should choice wonderful and good services hotel to create a good impression to somebody. The information about the hotel in the internet is very much. However, we have to go there to meet reception or hotel management to have information about hotel. We must take photograph with reception or hotel management. Then, we write assignment with suitable contents.
We get a study group together and each person contributes us expertise in the part of this assignment. We make a great effort to complete it because all of member our group are always hardworking. Nevertheless, the hotel report assignment is very useful to many students like us. It not only supply information but also broaden everyone knowledge. This assignment helps us practices many important skills such as: scanning, communicate, talk, presentation and group discussion skills. We know that tourists always feel comfortable with system hotel in Vietnam. This knowledge about hotel will helps us good study and know about hotel and have opportunity to develop for job in the future."
 

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Hello! Good day to everybody!! Please help me correct and give me some advice[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE], thanks.
"This hotel report assignment is rather an interesting assignment and Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is really an exciting choice with us. After entering the hotel to find (or: gather) information about it, we find that the hotel has many interesting things. It is a hotel that is a selection correct (or: suitable) for everybody. Due to this assignment, we have understood more about the hotel also services industry in Vietnam now. We write about its name, location, history, number of rooms, kinds of rooms, organizational chart, services and facilities and so on. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel [STRIKE]brings[/STRIKE] makes sure that tourists feel satisfied and comfortable [STRIKE]for tourists[/STRIKE] by modern services, stylish ambience, professional[STRIKE] service[/STRIKE] staff and especially, Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is the newest of 6 Rising Dragon Palace Hotel systems. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel is one of the good 2-star[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] or 3-star[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] hotel systems at Quarter Old now. Rising Dragon Palace Hotel [STRIKE] is an attraction places for tourism action[/STRIKE] is a tourist attraction and a place for many activities.
After completing this assignment, [STRIKE]we are really known[/STRIKE] we know exactly that Rising Dragon Palace Hotel will bring new impressions about systems hotel in Hanoi. [STRIKE]Having many problems is concentrated by us.[/STRIKE] We have been confronted with many problems. [STRIKE]Maybe[/STRIKE] The fact is that doing such an assignment is really a difficult thing with us because we have to overcome many challenges. For example, we have to spend much time on finding information about this hotel. [STRIKE]After finding about hotel to know about places and kind of hotel,[/STRIKE] After finding all the necessary information we have to go to the hotel (pl. hotels - I thought you have to go to six hotels?) together to make an on-site inspection. There are many hotels [STRIKE]but we don’t[/STRIKE] which do not allow us to enter [STRIKE]the hotel[/STRIKE] so we must go to many other places. Due to our skills and good communication [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] in the group (pl. groups – six groups or only one group?); we can find “Rising Dragon Palace Hotel”. Moreover, members of the groups lives far [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] from each other, and transportation is very difficult and disadvantageous, so [STRIKE]we are[/STRIKE] it is very difficult to meet. We find that we should choice a hotel that provides [STRIKE]wonderful[/STRIKE] excellent [STRIKE]and good[/STRIKE] services [STRIKE]hotel[/STRIKE] to create a good impression to somebody. The information about the hotel [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] on the internet is [STRIKE]very much[/STRIKE] considerable. However, we have to go there to meet receptionists or hotel management to have information about the hotel. We must also take photographs with receptionists or hotel management. Then, we write an assignment with suitable contents.
We get a study group together and each person contributes [STRIKE]us[/STRIKE] expertise [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] to the part of this assignment. We make a great effort to complete it because all [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] members of our group are always hard-working. Nevertheless, the hotel report assignment is very useful to many students like us. It not only supply information but also broadens everyone’s knowledge. This assignment helps us practice[STRIKE]s[/STRIKE] many important skills such as: scanning, communicating, talking, making presentations and gaining group discussion skills. We know that tourists always feel comfortable with [STRIKE]system hotel[/STRIKE] hotel resorts in Vietnam. This knowledge about hotel will helps us good study and know about hotel and have opportunity to develop for getting a job in the future."

What do you mean with “hotel system” Is it a hotel chain? Is every single system a hotel resort? Are all 6 systems situated at Quarter Old? Are there six groups and each group visit one of the hotels system? By not knowing all this I had difficulties to see whether a plural or singular word is correct.
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