correct my grammatical and give better expression please ?
Hello there my teachers
this stories I translated it but I am still sure that there are some grammatical mistajes in my translation so please if you dont mind correct my mistakes and if its possible give better expression than mine
I felt my mother came near to me and wanted to say something but
she hesitated till I asked her
what the wrong with you mother ?
she replied: nothing
then she went out and came back again
I am in pain a little bit she said :
oh! all right I will phone my father" I said
she replied : No
phone your brother he is in so and so home
soon my brother come in house wondering
" what is going here ' he said
she is in pain " I replied "
He smiled shyly and said :
I will send for a car
He went down a little then return with his friend's car ,
' common on ' he said
and when we got out
Oh my God ! unthinkable ! my mother is going to go with a car like this
it's white car ornamented with red flowers
it was nicly decorated to take the bride to her wedding party
spent a lot of time to convince her to go with that car
and may feeling pain forced her to
hope anybody help me
Re: correct my grammatical and give better expression please ?
I felt my mother came- come
what the wrong- what is wrong
I am in pain a little bit- I am in a bit of pain
so and so home- so-and-so's home
then return with his- returned
common on- come on
spent a lot of time to convince her to go with that car I spent
and may feeling pain forced her to- amybe the pain forced her to go
PS- Why are you writing on separate lines? You also need to punctuate it.