charred door- burned/badly burned door?
flickers of light bulb- flickering light bulbs
I was also mentioned- told that
was stolen also on duty- was stolen while he was on duty
how he can protect me against the evil forces?- how can he protect me? (evil forces seems unnecessary to me)
Also, I'd use Dear Sir or Madam, not To whom it may concern, which is used for references, etc.