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    Default Is this look like good motivtional paragraph ?

    This one is mean to write in a application for volunteer opportunity.

    From my childhood I have passion for serve others in my neighborhood by any mean I can.But this task give me a opportunity to serve me entire world so I'm quite eager to grab this opportunity.

    Can you give me your valuable suggestion?

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    Default Re: Is this look like good motivtional paragraph ?

    Quote Originally Posted by netgeek View Post
    This one is mean to write intended to be written in an application for a volunteer opportunity.

    From my childhood I have had a passion for to serve others in my neighborhood by any means I can. But This task gives me an opportunity to serve me the entire world so I'm quite eager to grab this opportunity.

    Can you give me your valuable suggestion?
    Please see my amendments above. Concentrate on your use of articles, particularly when to use "a" and "an".

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    Thank you very much for your valuable advices

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