I am studying an English language course, and my teacher uses the following commercial voice over to illustrate bad spoken English, he said the intonation is no good. But I think the voice over is good. Would like to seek second opinion how the voice over can be improved.
1983 - Commercial - YouTube.flv - YouTube
Anthony the learner
It's very formal, flat and curt British.
It is supposed to inform the viewer, not entertain or even engage the viewer.
I don't think advertising voice-overs is a good place to study everyday speech. By definition, they are gimicky and exaggerated.
Better to listen to audio books or even TV newscasts.