a wordy sentence:
A bottle of red wine was order by Grant, even though Marie had had the expectation that he would be placing an order
for a bottle of white wine"
Manhattan says, this one is concise:
"Grant ordered a bottle of red wine, even though Marie had expected him to order a bottle of white wine"
Isnt the following one correct and concise? If not, why?
"Grant ordered a bottle of red wine though Marie had expected a bottle of white wine"
thanks in advance
The sentence doesn't tell who she expected to order the wine - that part is missing I get that now.